The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy — and generate additional tax revenues — is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
The author claims here that the best way to improve Hopewell’s economy is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View. Stated in this way, the argument is rife with holes and assumptions. To justify his reasoning the author claims that Ocean View built a golf course and resort hotel two years ago and their tax revenues increased by 30 percent. However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that there is no clear correlation between the provided evidence and the author’s conclusion.
First of all, the author readily assumes that if Ocean View has increased economy because of a golf course and resort hotel they as well need to build similar structures to record an increase in tax revenues. This is merely an assumption without much solid ground. For example, the author did not mention whether in Hopewell there are any resort hotels and golf courses or not. What if there are already similar hotels? And building one more of them probably will not improve the situation.
Secondly, in the passage, it is claimed that the generation of additional tax revenues will improve their economy. This is also a weak and unsupported assumption. To illustrate it further let’s consider that they have built a golf course and resort hotels and have an increase of five percent, it also an increase but is it beneficial for them? Probably, not. It would be more persuasive if the author provided a more detailed analysis of the increase in tax revenues.
Finally, the author provides the example of Ocean View and concludes that their success will be similar to Ocean Views success. However, the author fails to demonstrate any clear correlation between Ocean View and Hopewell. Stated in this way the passage gives the reader an impression that this is the authors wishful thinking rather than convincing evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s recommendation is unpersuasive in its current form. To bolster it further, the author should provide more concrete pieces of evidence. To better assess the evidence the author should bring a more detailed analysis of the situation in Hopewell and make better connections with the situation in Ocean View.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1770 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.51 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.003 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lets'?
Suggestion: lets
...ed assumption. To illustrate it further let’s consider that they have built a golf ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06371191136 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62152328681 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8873480955 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2105263158 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232812385796 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693266069806 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899539611045 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141349979463 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686557343675 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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