An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that people from impoverished nations of Tagus have a deficiency in vitamin A. The organization which has developed the new breed of millet with high amount of vitamin A has assumed that the government will be paying subsidies for farming this costly product and also assumed that people will be ready to accept this new form which they think might be dangerous to them. The questions that should be answered before bringing this into action are elucidated below.
Firstly, it is mentioned that people in the impoverished nations are deficient in vitamin A. But is is true that every single person within these nations are vitamin A deficient? By adopting this new breed as the staple food for these nations, can it harm those people who are not deficient? The organization should consider the entire population while making this drastic change since there might also be ample amount of people who are not deficient and eating a breed with high amounts of vitamin A might harm them with over dose of vitamin A.
Secondly, since the argument mentions that the new type of millet is costly, it should also consider if the governments of these impoverished nations are ready to provide subsidies for the farmers. It is common that impoverished nations turned so due to lack of money in the economy or a lot of debts on the nation or might have an irresponsible government. When there is lack of money, then it might be an impossible task for the government to provide huge sums of money for this new breed of millets for hundreds of farmers planning on taking this up. Also if the case is of an irresponsible government, they would not care about the well being of the people. This means that the government would be indifferent to providing any subsidies to its farmers. So, before promoting this new breed, the organization should consider how capable the government is in taking the task up.
Thirdly, since the argument states that millet is already a staple food for Tagus people, they might have a traditional grain that farmers might be using to bring up the crops. The question here is, how skeptical are the people of Tagus for adopting a new seed? Most traditional farmers have a stock of their own produce that they use as the seeds for their new crop. The farmers have the knowledge on how to use their old seed. But since they are foreign to this new type of millet, the farmer might be skeptical to adopt to new techniques of farming and use different pesticides or taking different care of the crop. The willingness and education of the farmers should also be considered while promoting this new breed.
Finally, it needs to be understood that the company has taken up a good task of supporting the impoverished nations but it should also consider the ample of questions that may rise up while promoting their invention for the success of the product.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2348 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.677 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.544 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...nations are deficient in vitamin A. But is is true that every single person within th...
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Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...person within these nations are vitamin A deficient? By adopting this new breed as the stap...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 555, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... of farmers planning on taking this up. Also if the case is of an irresponsible gove...
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Line 7, column 518, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...illet, the farmer might be skeptical to adopt to new techniques of farming and use diffe...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77290836653 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57836958453 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396414342629 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4538594655 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.8 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45841204923 0.218282227539 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152241447253 0.0743258471296 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774424942147 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263645508387 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103616746281 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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