Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculation against cow flu to be routinely administered
The author argues that the inoculation against cow flu should not be routinely administered, because people receiving the inoculation may risk a small possibility in causing undesired death, despite the potential effectiveness of the inoculation in saving people’s lives. At the first glance, the author’s argument seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it is based on some dubious assumptions and faulty reasoning.
First of all, the author assumes that the inoculation against the cow flu would be much more dangerous than the disease, so that the medical practice should not be regularly administered. However, the author does not provide any evidence that clearly indicates the possibility of death resulted from either the inoculation or the cow flu. Furthermore, we are not even sure how contagious the disease may be, if the government takes no measure to curb its spreading. It’s still probable that the disease may cause more death than what the inoculation could lead to. Besides, the vaccines can be improved with further medical research to lower its risk, which offers a better solution than just giving up the policy.
Second, the author supports his argument with vague words, such as “many lives” and “small possibility.” It seems that the author tries to cite some statistical evidence to make his/her statement more convincing. However, the author has failed to provide exact number that indicates how many people can be saved and how possible people will die due to the inoculation. The author should resort to some medical research data or governmental publication to reinforce his/her argument with an authoritative voice. Furthermore, the demographic group more susceptible to the danger of the inoculation is supposed to be specified in order to speculate whether the threat posed by the inoculation will affect a large population and how it can be avoided. Therefore, the author should use more statistical evidence to shed lights on his/her argument
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1650 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.14 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.801 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.62 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3679245283 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93088003011 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562893081761 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9205456015 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267469095134 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100129424955 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904707098778 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197106087169 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452878139757 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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