Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Some might argue that students should be dissuaded from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to "succeed". But others might maintain that students be encouraged to pursue their interests irrespective of the likelihood of "success". After careful examination of various evidences, students should encouraged rather than being discouraged from pursuing their preferred fields of study whether such fields seem auspicious or not.
To begin with, educational institutions run the risk of churning out "professionals" who have no passion for the work they do even if they succeed in their respective fields. This is because success and fulfillment are not mutually exclusive. Such professionals might end up being remiss in dispensing their duties appropriately. For instance, a doctor - who was dissuaded from pursuing his musical passion - has a higher tendency to get complacent compared to one whose life-long goal has been to help humanity by saving lives. This is also partly due to the tendency for individuals to commit all of their energy to that which they love.
Second of all, the notion that these students are unlikely to succeed paradoxically makes it more exigent for determined and passionate students to pursue such fields due to certain reasons. Competition is relatively low, and such students stand a higher chance of being eminent in their chosen fields. A good example is the legendary Lionel Messi who happened to suffer a serious cognitive illness that affected his motor movements at a very young age. Unsuprisingly, he was discouraged from pursuing his interest in football due to the notion that he was very unlikely to "succeed". Today, however, Messi is arguably known as the world's best footballer. Therefore, students should be encouraged rather than being discouraged from pursuing fields about which they are passionate irrespective of the likelihood of success.
Although others might raise the argument that it is quite risky to pursue a field with a low likelihood of success, this argument, however, does not hold water when one considers that the world in which we live in today continues to evolve in an endless fashion. A purportedly "unsuccessful" field today might be the "hottest" field tomorrow. For these reasons, it is not advisable to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study that in which they deemed unlikely to "succeed".
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their respective fields. This is because success and fulfillment are not mutually...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'worlds the best'.
Suggestion: worlds the best
...however, Messi is arguably known as the worlds best footballer. Therefore, students should ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an endless fashion" with adverb for "endless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ch we live in today continues to evolve in an endless fashion. A purportedly 'unsuccessful'...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50263157895 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.52170917516 2.79657885939 126% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523684210526 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1527769726 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229857542015 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875927493078 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851495438999 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162538969262 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275279547324 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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