Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Animals play a huge role in the development of the welfare of a society. They may be commercial animals like cow which provide us milk or endangered animals like snakes, which even though are not habitant in metropolitan areas, play a great role in balancing the eco system. Thus, it is important to save each and every animal in the world from natural calamities as well as from human activities; therefore, I strongly disagree with the response stating that society should not concentrate on saving species unless they are demolished by human activities, for the following reasons stated below.
To begin with, as a human being, it is important to keep balance in our mundane work. Similarly, it is important to keep a balance in nature. Here, nature is represented as animals and plants and the balance is often termed as ‘ecosystem’ in science. If one animal becomes extinct, the whole chain which was initially balance, will break up. For instance, let’s consider an ecosystem where an eagle eats snakes; snakes eat mice; mice eats insects; insects eats plants; plants turn into minerals into the soil, providing as food for other plants. If snakes become extinct, then eagle won’t have food and hence it will die. Moreover, as there are not predators for mice, it becomes abundant and might arise problems to humans. So, to be concise, each and every living being is important.
However, do we have the money to save all species? The answer is no. It is impossible to save all species as there are uncountable number of species which includes birds, animals and insects. Moreover, Even if the government funds for protection of wildlife species, it is not possible. But we can solve the problem to some extent by not disturbing the species life styles. Humans tend to build industries and factories in places where there are no human habitant, but what they don’t discern are the other species living there. Moreover, if they start building factories or companies in forests, there is a possibility of animals to disturb humans by appearing in cities, towns or villages. This situation will cause huge commotion and destruction. Other human activities which destroy animals are hunting. Also, species become extinct not only due to human’s activities but also due to global warming and natural disasters, which cannot be controlled by humans. Hence, it is crucial to respect all living species and try to preserve them by considering some precautions.
In conclusion, Even though it is implausible to save all animals, society must take some measures to preserve what we have left. Therefore, people should not only concentrate on the animals which are affected by human activities but also animals which are becoming extinct from due factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'habitants'?
Suggestion: habitants
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2313.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06126914661 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66115899747 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522975929978 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.3567395892 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.375 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0416666667 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209306172095 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553494189014 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530806239699 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134824184544 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543371905246 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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