Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Having a goal in our human life is a crucial element. It is in our nature to have some goals to achieve the life we had dreamt about since our childhood. Nowadays, especially after the advent of the industrial revolution, people owing to their nature of seeking fame, try to adopt some behaviors and goals which can be categorized into long-term and short-term goals. The statement attempts to convey the idea that youngsters should be motivated to pursue long-term goals rather than following an achievement intended for momentary fame and recognition. I can’t entirely agree with this idea since I do believe that both short-term and long-term goals can be beneficial to every individual. I feel this way because of two reasons which I will investigate in the following paragraphs.
For one thing, we, human beings, could devote most of our time to achieving our long-term goals since it will undoubtedly direct us to a successful life. In other words, we should abandon those activities we deem useless in exchange for a better life. People, throughout history, have concluded that if they want their life to be as the way they had dreamt, they should let go of their hobbies and things they like and, in return, be provided with something they have in their minds. For instance, Elon Musk, the richest man in the world, once said that “when my friends and roommates were obsessed with going to the best parties and gatherings, I focused on my goals by improving my skills in the field of economics, engineering, and psychology. If it weren’t for him to let go of those momentary things, he wouldn’t have been the richest man in the globe. Therefore, children should pay attention to the goals that would provide us long-term happiness and success.
Secondly, although it is imperative to think about our future and our big ambitions, that doesn’t mean that we should ignore everything that makes us happy and successful during our present time. In other words, we could consider doing things that help us to be motivated and brought us fame even for a short time. I think these short-term goals can positively affect us in our lives. For instance, there are numerous days where we are not motivated as we were in the past. Human beings can develop new skills or throw themselves into getting things done to be famous for a short time. This fame will definitely encourage people to continue their success plans and achieve their long-term goals. For example, Bill gates, the father of digital technologies, started his business in late 1980, and he galvanized himself throughout this hardworking by attending into a golf club. He then was awarded the golf champion prize. He mentioned that that trophy he got that day helped him to concentrate on the big ambitious goals he had abandoned about a year ago. This is not only had any conflict with the long-term goals, but it boosted his confidence and helped him get back at his valuable plans. Hence, it is inevitable to get your dreamy life without pushing yourself into transitory fame.
In conclusion, it is logical to both pursue goals that bring us happiness in the short and long run. While it is crucial for us to seek goals that are long-time oriented, we should not underestimate what impacts those short-term goals can introduce to our lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, for one thing, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 93.0 33.0505617978 281% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2756.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86925795053 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65093275434 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501766784452 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.959332835 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.24 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.64 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22016336843 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677047591339 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534992199747 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155618165241 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588850395542 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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