Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives.
What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?.
It is argued that the amount of stress from academic, social and commercial that children have to suffer is increasing today. In my opinion, I believe that this situation is caused by many reasons and I will suggest some reasonable solutions to solve this issue.
There are several reasons why children are experiencing the pressure from a wide range of aspects. Firstly, I assume that academic pressure is the main one for children. Schools nowadays are competitive environment, students not only must face pressure by teachers but also by themselves. For example, to promote the sense of learning of students, many teachers created a ranking system, they publicize the scores of students and arrange them from high to low respectively. And a student who get a quite high score may be still feel stress because his or her score may lower than the peers. As a result, an invisible pressure always cause them learning like crazy. Secondly, the social pressure especially from parents has strongly affect their spirit. Parents now often set a ideal model and hope their child to be like that. Therefore, they put high expectation for children and it inadvertently become the pressure for their children. Thirdly, commercial pressure also is one of the factors raise stress for students. Children who are the most easily effected subjects love watching advertisements. So that commercial pressure simply come to children through marketing programs and advertisements which target them to some difficult standards. Consequently, these standards unconsciously discourage children from being themselves.
I also believe that there are some effective solutions for this problem. Education system needs to be transformed. What students learned should be put on the top instead of scores. Simultaneously, parents need to lower their expectations and develop children true potential, they have to know that studying is not all about the success of their children in the future. Furthermore, the authorities should limit the advertisements aiming at children and harder check the content of them before publishing.
In conclusion, there are a great amount number of reasons which causing the pressure for children, but it still can be solved. I hope governments and sociality will seriously pay more attention in this matter in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to like'
Suggestion: to like
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Line 5, column 733, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'affected'.
Suggestion: affected
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Line 5, column 776, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Line 5, column 899, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...ation for children and it inadvertently become the pressure for their children. Thirdl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36856368564 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91989039965 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6360252635 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0454545455 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7727272727 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86363636364 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337749199374 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952094505678 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061472481324 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171503013534 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789019497363 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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