Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar,which causes many health problems.Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Sugar is one of the most common ingredients in our daily food such as bread ,candy ,cakes.However ,consuming a great deal of them may lead to serious diseases.Some people suggest that making sugary products more costly could limit these problems.I believe that this is not an efficient solution.
Firstly ,increasing price in sugary products would cause the hunger for the poor. Necessity food such as bread, juice and sushi usually contain sugar in it. Provided that they were all expensive, how could those people survive?
It is also impossible to eliminate sugary products for persons having hustle and bustle life in city. They have no choice but accepting instant food available in the supermarket due to its convenience .This is always added sugar in it since it makes the taste better for the majority. Also, although consumers are warned by various mass media sources from television, journal to personal communication about sugar eating related illness, namely obesity, diabetes ,they normally do not have time and space to take care their own gardens to grow plants without sugar.
Therefore ,the answer for the question how to curb the percentage of people consuming sugar is manufacturers should mention exactly the sugary amount they put into their products. In most cases, sugar is combined together with energy or other healthy elements to make food seem less dangerous for users. To do this,, the government should take measures to assess their products regularly and penalize strictly violent cases if any. Hence, parents could set their minds at rest to select and limit sugar in their families’ diets .As a result, the risk of having obesity, diabetes would be decreased in our society.
In general ,I believe that the best remedy for restricting sugar in food is lying on the precise information that manufactures provide rather than making them more costly for the public.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, in general, such as, as a result, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15210355987 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55304733831 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656957928803 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.9453882392 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252825054134 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929206231019 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343814189511 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141219354591 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301364781663 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.