Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this?
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In recent times, using smartphones in spare time has gained widespread popularity among a majority of residents across the globe. While this trend is attributable to various justifications, I firmly believe that this development affects detrimentally to the social well-being.
On the one hand, the trend towards utilizing smart digital devices in free time is ascribed to a wide range of causes, the most common of them lies in its convenience. As a matter of fact, before the appearance of mobile phones, people were accustomed to go outside and communicate with their friends rather than stay at home and use their smartphones to get in touch with everyone in the social media. Thanks to the useful features of phones, individuals just have to stay at their own houses, open the apps such as Facebook or Instagram to come into contact with a huge number of virtual friends, even someone that they have not talked face-to-face before. For example, after the invention of Mark Zuckerberg about the social media named Facebook, more people, especially the youth, have opportunities to make friends with other Facebook users, which has bridged the gap between citizens of every continents worldwide simply because it is not necessary to travel a long distance in order to meet their new friends.
On the other hand, I wholeheartedly approve that this trend might have deleterious impacts on the health of people overusing those kind of smart devices. From a scientific perspective, the prolonged exposure to smartphones can cause health deterioration in the ways that overshadow the phone users. As a result, spending a large part of their spare time chatting with their virtual friends instead of doing outdoor activities might lead to health deterioration. By way of illustration, the number of individuals wasting their time using Facebook in break time in a large number of nations are rising at an alarming rate, and several statistics indicate that recent years have witnessed a significant increase in the number of people suffering from obesity or myopia. Consequently, this could result in the worsened community health, especially for the young generations, who spend an average of 5 hours using the smartphones.
In conclusion, there are some explanation behind the greater role of smartphones in free time in modern life. Nevertheless, I lean towards the opinion that this is a disadvantageous development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to going', 'accustomed to gonna'.
Suggestion: accustomed to going; accustomed to gonna
...ppearance of mobile phones, people were accustomed to go outside and communicate with their frie...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...pacts on the health of people overusing those kind of smart devices. From a scientific per...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ir time using Facebook in break time in a large number of nations are rising at an alarming rate,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, even so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2236503856 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99534071608 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588688946015 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.4431954472 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.307692308 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9230769231 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227378988222 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781924991928 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424013783268 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135746073793 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449213892259 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.