Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is argued that acknowledging any unfavourable circumstances in lives involving the lack of money of an unsatisfactory employment is essential, while others believe that attempting to improve these situations is better. This essay will discuss both views before reaching the conclusion that terrible conditions should be refined.
On the one hand, some people claim that it is acceptable to have dissatisfied situations because owning something is still better than having nothing. Particularly, there are many people in the world living in poor conditions that include starvation, poverty, disease and so on. Take African as an example, several countries there have to depend on humanitarian organisations for food assistance. Therefore, people who have a job with an unfavourite or insufficient money are luckier and do not need to complain about it. Moreover, learning to accept unfavourable circumstances would help them to relieve channel emotions. In other words, if people stop worrying about these situations, they will have a comfortable and happy life. It seems that these circumstances are not as unacceptable as many people think.
On the other hand, I strongly believe it is much better when people strive to improve disadvantageous situations because of its importance. To be specific, people who attempt to get better would have a stronger willpower. For example, a staff member feeling unsatisfied about her position at work may be motivated to develop her skills to get advancement. Furthermore, nothing will be improved without giving it a try. If people have a positive attitude and are willing to face impediments to refine bad situations, improvements are often possible. For instance, there is a great number of students in Vietnam given scholarships to go abroad thanks to their efforts. Clearly, attitudes determine altitudes and accepting terrible circumstances is not always the optimal choice.
In conclusion, although some people still say that unfavourable situations should be accepted, I am of the view that people should put in efforts to improve these conditions since some benefits are offered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49696969697 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1592213475 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2926206126 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.705882353 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297670614012 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856725656092 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737562253807 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191928747045 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050026816498 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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