Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different view about which way is the greatest way to improve the level of public health, the amount of increasing facilities or other measures. While a some of sports equipment can sometime useful in health, I believe that other measures to enhance people health is more effective.
On the one hand, it is more convenient for people to do exercise that there are a large number of sports apparatus offered by the government. As we all know, not everyone have sports places or equipment in their home or communities which they can not sport frequently. If government provide sports facilities in public places that can help more people have ability to exercise. However, a lot of sports facilities supplied in the environment may led to excess of resources which not all the citizen know how to use them and the facilities will waste.
On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to use other methods to improve public health. From the view of psychology, our behavior change by our consciousness. Government not only need to build the facilities for people, but also need to improve people healthy awareness that change people behavior from the origin. In our daily life, we can see some charity advertisement propagandize the important of health habits and body that can improve the level of people health awareness. Also, we can watch some sports competition that it is very funny and encourage people go outside to take part in the sports activities that may improve their healthy level.
In conclusion, I can understand why people might think increasing number of sports facilities will effective to improve public health, but it seems to me that other measures such as change people awareness is much more useful in improving people fitness.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or people to do exercise that there are a large number of sports apparatus offered by the governm...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es which they can not sport frequently. If government provide sports facilities in...
^^
Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...alth awareness. Also, we can watch some sports competition that it is very funny and e...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98653198653 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66990841287 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2112982041 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.416666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360056258467 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151330510861 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10422047979 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269577410007 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998684377197 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...or people to do exercise that there are a large number of sports apparatus offered by the governm...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es which they can not sport frequently. If government provide sports facilities in...
^^
Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...alth awareness. Also, we can watch some sports competition that it is very funny and e...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98653198653 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66990841287 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2112982041 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.416666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360056258467 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151330510861 0.084324248473 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10422047979 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269577410007 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998684377197 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.