Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people believe that it is significant to use free time for activities that improve the mantallity such as reading physical books, searching acadamic knowledge or doing word puzzles, but other citizens think that it is important to relax the mind during leisure time. From my point of view, both notions have their own benefits and drawbacks with each person and each situation. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
On the one hand, spending leisure time for improving the mind is a useful habit to the adolesence life and the social. Not only can this habit improve teenager's knowledge, information and social skill, but also it will lead children become talent individual in the future who contribute their ability for the development of the nation. Furthermore, children can avoided the terrible influence from the social such as addicted to game or drugs. To illustrate, Bill Gate is the billionare England people and the manager of Microsoft company who have had numerous helpful affection for the teenagers. When he was a children, his hobby was reading book and searching information about new technology in the computer and this is the reason for his mechine talent, successful and achivement nowaday. In additon, children will be taken a plenty of pressure from this habit, the achivement, pressure and willness of teacher or family can be annoyed the development in their career.
On the other hand, leisure time is hugely neccessary time to student relax, take a rest and more comfortable after hard-working hour at education. Moreover, teenager can avoid the insignificant stress and pressure and also it will help student brighter to get more achivement as they can.
To conclude, by my agrument from these essay both statement have advantages and drawbacks, but i mostly agree that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. The youngs generation need to have bright plan to have more success in their career and the development of the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09756097561 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70271939859 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557926829268 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.708981079 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.615384615 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31002627055 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10463078823 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143609406861 0.0667982634062 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198271997409 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122667559266 0.056905535591 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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