Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion
There are two type of people looking the development of children for being excellent. The first group is believed that kids should be encouraged to compete with their peers as purpose of improving skills. The others consider that being emphaty and cooperative for youngsters are the key point to become useful adults. In my perspective, I do agree with the later opinion that children must grow as good person in social context.
It is believed by some people that implementing sense of caring to the others is the best way to develope kids in positive way. This method brings advantage for young generation, such as improving their social skill. In other words, they will care to help others. For example, in 2010, numbers of students in Indonesia, held charity to assit victims who are infected by Merapi eruption in Central Java, this program, resulted from being emphaty. Therefore, the reason behind a succesfull charity for the victims was emerged from sense of cooperative. The young generations worked together to conclude the program as their purpose to assist everyone who needs help. Hence, as the purpose f become useful adults, these two value are important to purseu the objective.
On the other hand, the other type of people think that children should be competitive. In this context, children encourage to compete with their peers in order to enrich their competencies. Children being motivated if they gain better grade than their friend, resulting sense of competitiveness amongst them. However, this method will lead children to being distructive, self-centered, and less sense of caring.
In conclusion, if people only consider competiveness amongst children will lead them for becoming good person, is such a pity. In my perspective, sense of emphaty and work together are benefical for young generations to confront the future. however, at the end, we should respect others’ preference and views.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'competing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: competing
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Suggestion: However
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22903225806 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74612393568 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9072480941 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0555555556 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297248948514 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939312156468 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670746617849 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192093155616 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741224307572 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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