These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays some individuals use an amount of their own money for attending cultural or sporting events. I personally agree with this statement for some reasons which I will explant in this essay.
To begin with, one major reason for this is that most people love various types of festivals especially cultural events because they can expand insight and release stress from activities of life. For instance, one of the famous cultural events in Indonesia which have gone international is named Dieng Culture Festival. This festival is performed every year in Indonesia, and others who are interested in traditional culture will visit it, and also they will feel amused by the event. Moreover, I think that many who spend money buy a ticket to a sporting event simply so they can see their idol or favorite team play against other clubs. A good example of this is a man who is enthusiastic to support a team when he attends one of his favorite football games at the stadium. Finally, we should also consider that some people will enjoy and be entertained by attending cultural or sporting activities. Also, Individuals attend this activity because they are seeking entertainment to break up their workaholic lifestyle.
Looking from another perspective, it may be said that attending in the cultural festival or sporting events waste money because purchasing tickets and souvenirs are not cheaper. However, I believe that this is an unwise argument because people coming there have prepared their budgets.
In summary, it seems to me that attending traditional festivals and sport events gives us the positive impact on our life. This is as long as people have enough budgets to visit the events.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1022, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to break up their workaholic lifestyle. Looking from another perspective, it may...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, for instance, i think, in summary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07857142857 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64820886716 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4584476636 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.384615385 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268065633497 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997599594941 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411003217144 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168803900084 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233918103966 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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