whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck to what extent Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck to what extent .Do you agree or disagree?

Given the fact that success just come to person trying hard .Indeed , a dozen of evidence from nany inventors all over the world makes it clear to everyone .Therefore, I completely disagree that while some people think that they have to be lucky to achieve their aims

It is said that success is a process of doing one's best .Particularly, Edision ,one of the most significant inventor , is first to make a light for human-being .With his persistence and his industrious , he finally succeed in inventing lighting bulb although he came through failing many times.From this story ,we can realize that success is 1% lucky and 99% hard-working

However, luck is a small factor in determining one's achievement .Firstly ,people can't solely depend on your luck to make achievement .If students don't revise the lesson , they can't depend on a luck to pass an exam.Secondly, a luck only contributes to a short-term fortune.It can see that a person winning a lottery is partly to help them meet both ends meet, other is required to your earning.As a result, everyone pursuiting achievement depends not only a fortune but also your ability

In conclusion, I strongly believe that success is real when everyone try to do it best not hope for any magic

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1038.0 1615.20841683 64% => OK
No of words: 211.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91943127962 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83330268597 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668246445498 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 506.74238477 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 211.0 20.2975951904 1040% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1038.0 106.682146367 973% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 211.0 20.7667163134 1016% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 115.0 7.06120827912 1629% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.01903807615 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139947456328 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139947456328 0.084324248473 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710797692408 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336033610966 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 107.2 13.0946893788 819% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -134.23 50.2224549098 -267% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 84.4 11.3001002004 747% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.92 8.58950901804 209% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 9.78957915832 552% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 86.4 10.1190380762 854% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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