People who cannot accept others' criticisms cannot succeed in working in groups.
Criticisms sometimes are painful but helpful way to assist one grow effectively. However, people hold on different opinions on whether they can not accept others' criticisms can not succeed in working in groups. As far as I'm concerned, I tend to agree with the statement for the following reasons.
To begin with, people need to be more advanced in order to succeed in groups, and accepting criticism from others is a essential way to make progress. That is to say, people sometimes find it hard to find out their drawbacks and criticisms can always remind them those disadvantages. For example, I always thought that I could speak English fluently at university. Before the TOEFL test, I organized a study group to help others conquer this exam and to my surprise, one of my members always teased my Taiwanese accent. At that time, I realized that I needed to work on removing my weird Taiwanese accent. Thus, I become more proficient in English because of the criticism from my member.
In addition, succeeding in groups means we should maintain good relationship between group members, and accepting criticisms is vital to keep a nice relationship with others. To further elaborate, if people always ignore criticisms from others, other people will not be willing to provide their own perspectives. Not long, a group will break up. Take my friend, Julie, as an example. She had a Biology final group presentation in her fresh year, yet one of her teammates always insisted that his idea was the best, and everyone needed to follow him. Many of teammates felt unhappy and they just stopped offering their opinions. In the end, their group only got B and no one wanted to have group work with that guy afterwards.
Last but not least, being successful in groups means people are capable of being a good leader in a group , and accepting criticisms is significant for a leader. To clarify this point, a leader need to negotiate with members, control the whole projects, and take any advice from members even if it’s a criticism. For instance, though my boss is a cleaver and well organized person, she can’t stand anyone’s complaint and any advice from her team members. Therefore, team member all think she is not a competent leader.
For those aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that people who can not receive criticisms from others can not succeed in groups because they will not make progress, and they are unable to maintain good relationship with others. Also, they fail to become a good leader in a group.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
Criticisms sometimes are painful but helpful way to assist one g...
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Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...succeed in working in groups. As far as Im concerned, I tend to agree with the sta...
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Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... and accepting criticism from others is a essential way to make progress. That is...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...apable of being a good leader in a group , and accepting criticisms is significant...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94172494172 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7248391719 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519813519814 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2239612236 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3636363636 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22280064707 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638599874904 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813961548662 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140176905533 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492957117785 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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