Education is more difficult than it used to be
From senators voting in the general assembly to old woman working in small retailer, people in the society all have access to smartphones now. In addition, a fair amount of children are equipped with smartphones by their parents. Whereas some people believe such action is acceptable, others believe that it have made parents difficult to educate their child as their child may get addicted to the Internet. From my perspective, the difficulty of educating a child have by no means increased today, as children always waste their time and technology can actually promote a child's performance at study.
The major reason for my propensity is that children have a tendency to waste their time out of their nature. It is merely their method that changed. Children are not likely to put effort into events that are considered beneficial by the parents provided that cellphones have never existed. For example, children in the past would spend their time on playing football or reading novel. At that time, parents would demonize sports and blame it for their children's unsatisfying performance in school. When it comes to the contemporary era, children are attracted more by cell phone, online games or social media. As a result, these things replaced sports or other activities to be the thing that parents abhor. Therefore, since the nature of children have not varied throughout human history, there will always be something to account for a child's improper behavior.
Another supporting reason is that modern technology can help a child's study. Parents prone to believe that modern technology prevents their kid from concentrating on their study, yet the truth is the exact opposite. Take encyclopedia as an example, people may have to go over several hundred of pages to find what they want. However, with the advent of social media or cell phones, with a few clicks, answers will be presented on the screen. In addition, the answers provided are usually more specific than those on an encyclopedia. Thus, it is rather obvious that children save time and increase their efficiency from cell phones. Consequently, parents' education burden are relieved as they no longer have to browse the encyclopedia for questions they cannot answer.
However, some people may argue that cases where children get addicted to cell phone or social media do exist. Yet, I believe that is not an inherent feature of games or cell phones. Great education is a goal that shall be achieved though the effort of both parents and children. Instead of blaming games or cell phones, parents should focus on the reason their children get addicted to such activity.
In conclusion, though there are cases where parents cannot educate their children because of cell phones, such cases do not prevail. Therefore, the difficult of education have not increased recently with the presence of electronic devices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13800424628 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6056863897 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486199575372 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5717423544 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118095238148 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036149236555 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493059872904 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0767320857178 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292032287952 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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