Artic deer live on islands on Canada’s artic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough. At least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer’s being unable to follow their age old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument that the decline in Arctic deer populations is as a result of current global warming trends may seem logical at first glance. The assumptions made in the argument must be first, be analyzed and needs to be further looked into, before we can decide if there is a population decline and if these trends have an impact in their hunt for food on ice. The following paragraphs are aimed at analyzing these assumptions.
First, the writer assumes that the reports submitted by the local hunters covered all the islands on Canada’s arctic regions, but what if it didn’t? What if the sample size used for the report only covered a few islands and the results are now being generalized? Similarly, there is also no evidence showing the areas of all the islands on Canada’s arctic region to conclude that there was actually a decline in the deer populations.
Subsequently, the writer goes further to support his argument by assuming that since the global warming trends tallies with reports the local farmers have provided, then there is likely to be a decrease in deer populations. Without a doubt, there is a possibility that this may be true but on the other hand, it just may not. Animals, just like human beings have the ability to adapt for survival, even plants adapt sometimes for survival. So what if these changes favored the deer and they now have an alternative to getting cold plants on ice? What if the deer discovered and adapted to cold plants on the island? so they no longer have to cross frozen ice? Unless the answers to these questions are provided, then there is no evidence that global warming contributed to the decline in the artic deer population.
Furthermore, the author goes on to conclude that the climate-related trends, have affected their migration patterns in search of cold plants over ice; which in turn, would have adverse effect on their population size. However, there is no evidence shown that the deer has not developed new patterns for movement to hunt for food. Also, it is clearly stated by the author that they are ‘trends’ and interestingly, trends change with time, they can last for short or long periods. There is also no evidence shown by the author that these trends occurred long enough to lead to a decline in population.
In conclusion, the writer is not necessarily mistaken in stating that global warming trends has an impact on their migration patterns in search for food; which in turn caused a population decline. After all, global warming has unfavorable effects on the environment and can cause changes in the environment, which could lead to a population decrease. However, for this argument to be valid, the writer must submit more conclusive evidences that these factors actually led to population decrease. But without such evidence, we cannot conclude that global warming had an impact on the populations of artic deer.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: The assumptions made in the argument must be first, be analyzed and needs to be further looked into, before we can decide if there is a population decline and if these trends have an impact in their hunt for food on ice.
Description: The fragment be first , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace first with adjective
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to into and ,
Sentence: First, the writer assumes that the reports submitted by the local hunters covered all the islands on Canada's arctic regions, but what if it didn't? What if the sample size used for the report only covered a few islands and the results are now being generalized?
Description: The fragment hunters covered all is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace covered with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Description: An adverb, particle is not usually followed by an adverb, nominal
Suggestion: Refer to t and ?
Sentence: Subsequently, the writer goes further to support his argument by assuming that since the global warming trends tallies with reports the local farmers have provided, then there is likely to be a decrease in deer populations.
Description: The fragment writer goes further is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace goes with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to trends and tallies
Sentence: Animals, just like human beings have the ability to adapt for survival, even plants adapt sometimes for survival.
Description: The fragment , even plants is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace even with adjective
Sentence: Also, it is clearly stated by the author that they are trends' and interestingly, trends change with time, they can last for short or long periods.
Description: The word last is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to last
Sentence: After all, global warming has unfavorable effects on the environment and can cause changes in the environment, which could lead to a population decrease.
Description: The fragment , global warming is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace global with adverb
Sentence: The argument that the decline in Arctic deer populations is as a result of current global warming trends may seem logical at first glance.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First, the writer assumes that the reports submitted by the local hunters covered all the islands on Canada's arctic regions, but what if it didn't? What if the sample size used for the report only covered a few islands and the results are now being generalized?
Error: didn Suggestion: did
Sentence: Without a doubt, there is a possibility that this may be true but on the other hand, it just may not.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Unless the answers to these questions are provided, then there is no evidence that global warming contributed to the decline in the artic deer population.
Error: artic Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, the author goes on to conclude that the climate-related trends, have affected their migration patterns in search of cold plants over ice; which in turn, would have adverse effect on their population size.
Error: climate-related Suggestion: climate related
Sentence: But without such evidence, we cannot conclude that global warming had an impact on the populations of artic deer.
Error: artic Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
Read a good grammar book.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2344 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.522 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.771 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n impact in their hunt for food on ice. The following paragraphs are aimed at analy...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'adapt'.
Suggestion: sometimes adapt
...lity to adapt for survival, even plants adapt sometimes for survival. So what if these changes ...
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Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...d adapted to cold plants on the island? so they no longer have to cross frozen ice...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, then, after all, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93075356415 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64956221658 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439918533605 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7705070537 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.285714286 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.380952381 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243253156535 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779395760687 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475078650806 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133410325904 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375764270682 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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