A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of
Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates.
Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to
treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-
processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-
year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates
and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study
participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies
had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods,
and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some
health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in
the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in
order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are
reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to
evaluate the prediction.
Based on the information provided in the passage the health experts have predicted that the increase in the use of salicylates will lead to fewer headaches in the future. However, the experts prediction does not seem well thought through, and neglects several other possibilities and effects of salicylates.
The author mentions the twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates however, does not clearly state the scope and validity of the study. For example, the study could have been conducted on younger people who do not frequently suffer from headaches. The sample size of the study can be inadequate. The study may not have considered the varied amount of salicylate consumption for each individual. We just do not know. Unless the study is fully representative, valid, and reliable, it cannot be used to back the prediction effectively.
Moreover, the author mentions that many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. But it is not clear what amount of salicylate consumption can lead to a decline in headaches. The amount of natural and added salicylates in the food should be enough to prevent headaches from happening. Even though, the salicylates belong to the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Does salicylate really help in assuaging headaches? To strengthen his/her argument, the author should present some evidence that can validate the use of salicylates as a prevention of headaches.
Additionally, the author also mentions that food-processing companies had discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and as a result, many companies plan to do so. Building upon the study the health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future. Although, there can be a few downsides to the excess consumption of salicylates. Are the side effects of consuming excess salicylates considered by companies or health experts? Does the company abide by safety guidelines for the use of salicylates? The author does not provide significant evidence that salicylates in any amount are safe to consume.
Ultimately, unless the questions and assumptions are addressed, the predictions made by the health experts cannot be justified.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1985 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.279 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.988 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.084 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.381 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'experts'' or 'expert's'?
Suggestion: experts'; expert's
...r headaches in the future. However, the experts prediction does not seem well thought t...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...fer even fewer headaches in the future. Although, there can be a few downsides to the ex...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, well, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44266666667 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10526434731 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477333333333 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7055880296 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1904761905 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343536951098 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104496289355 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101947884112 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169246212046 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100090237196 0.0628817314937 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.3550499002 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.