The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The prompt highlights one of the problems in Centerville which is the increase in the number of rage among sidewalk walkers from past three years and it was emphasized that the main reason for this is increase usage of mobile phones while walking. The major prone to this problem are the children which are too short to be seen as while texting people may bump into other walkers and can also slow down the traffic. The issue is resolved by banning of the mobile phone on roads for the walkers and it results in significant decline in the incidents number. The succeeding paragraph highlights all these reasons one by one and enlightens some of the possible considerations which may strengthen the given argument.
First of all, it was stated that the cause of sidewalk rage is mobile phone use as it results number of factors which frustrate others but there is no evidence regarding this to prove it. However, it may be possible that the cause of bump into others may be distraction of a person by sightseeing and his indulgent in some thoughts or may be the individual having near sightedness. Furthermore, these reasons can also slow down the traffic. To add more, there may be number of other reasons also, so the argument needs to be strengthened by giving appropriate statistical evidence to prove this idea.
Secondly, the argument is completely flawed by stating that ban on the usage of mobile phone results in the diminishing of these fights as it not provide any appropriate content supporting it. On the contrary, it may be possible that with the advancement in technology from past three years people started buying vehicles and the number of pedestrians may decrease on the roads which results in decrease in the cause of such accidents and thus less rage among masses. Thus, argument can be supported by comparison of data before and after and the population over which the data is taken.
Thirdly, one of the reasons which make this argument weak is that the ban is applied in the Middletown which lead to the tail off in the number of such incidents but no such evidence is given that such incidents occur prominently in the Middletown and no data about hometown is given. Hence, the argument can be approved by stating the divisions of these outrages in the city and how the application of ban helps in the laying of the problem.
Thus, the argument is not logically convincing. The evidence in support of the conclusion has failed to provide information on the above mentioned argument. Thus, there is need to support the argument with detailed and comprehensive analysis of the various points stated and the conclusion should be supported with the statistical data.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2194 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.759 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.351 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ers and can also slow down the traffic. The issue is resolved by banning of the mob...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ficant decline in the incidents number. The succeeding paragraph highlights all the...
^^^
Line 1, column 639, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...these reasons one by one and enlightens some of the possible considerations which may stren...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, while, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84164859002 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68039253088 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.422993492408 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4502897104 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8125 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5625 5.70786347227 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092208002961 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337471360138 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615957165842 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0528995422557 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537175458472 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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