The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Among Western societies, there is an increase number of overweight children by nearly 20% over a decade. This essay will outline the reasons behind the recent phenomenon as well as the consequences.
First of all, one of the reasons is that unhealthy lifestyle has influenced youngsters to become overweight. Together with the greater technological improvement, juveniles encourage spending too much time in indoor activities. Considering that, playing Minecraft, American’s kids favourite video game, may contribute to children snacking habit enhancing childhood phase experiencing an increase of BMI. Furthermore, poor children's diet preferences can be affected by parent’s responsibility. Apparently, mostly American parents are likely purchasing lunch or dinner in fast food restaurants, particularly McDonald’s. Faced with greater time constraints from childcare, they often turn to convenience foods without considering nutrition fact that tends to be high in sugar and fats.
Regarding aforementioned factors, the profound effect relates to have an effect on individual’s well-being particularly health problems. Obesity in children may inflict its cardiovascular system (heart attack and diabetes), giving rise to uncontrolled blood pressure and increasing level of cholesterol. This can be harmful in the long run and lead to medical complications. Moreover, South Korean overweight adolescent are more likely to be victims of bullying. it can influence them to be embarrassed with their body-shape that greatly affects their self-esteem. Consequently, these individuals fear to interact and socialize with people shaping them to be loners and socially awkward.
To sum up, several reasonable factors lie behind a phenomenon of children’s corpulence, including lack of physical activities because of advances in technology and unhealthy diet selection have a bad impact on the child’s body system. Indeed, this may engender serious physical and physiological problems to children’s health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.02413793103 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33462539366 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.710344827586 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.3332577655 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.764705882 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0588235294 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134979898668 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418008007256 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507140773811 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934186838542 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540484712478 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.34 12.4159519038 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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