In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from
their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that many people who are looking for job opportunities have to re-allocate from near their acquaintances to big metropolitans. While there are some clear drawbacks of this trend, I would argue these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are two major drawbacks in moving away from your neighborhood. Firstly, living in other areas may cause extra expenses for people to handle. When moving to a new area, people usually have to spend certain payments on housing, household applications or vehicles which is a huge problem since people have not yet found a stable job. Consequently, they may have to take the risk of bankruptcy unless they find a new source of income in time. Secondly, many people need to deal with mental issues when they are far away from their family and friends. Individuals, especially someone who finds it hard to start a new relationship from scratch, may have to face loneliness and anxiety since they are alone with no emotional support from their acquaintances. Therefore, this may cause mental illness which could have a detrimental effect on them.
On the other hand, the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. One reason for this view is that it will be a huge opportunity benefiting the career of people who decide to move away. Big metropolitans are always in demand for young and skillful individuals and they provide a lot of attractions with a promising salary and the chance to get a promotion. In other words, people may find more chances to change their life when they leave their area. Another reason is that some people want to challenge themselves with hardships. They want to experience new things and step out of their safe zone and moving to other locations may provide them with the essential factors for their developments, both physically and mentally. Consequently, social networking and overcoming hardship may help them to gain success and economical independence, which then satisfies their needs for becoming the better version of themselves.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the merits of a chance in gaining a high position with decent incomes, as well as the opportunities in satisfying the need to develop are more significant then the demerits of hardships in extra expenses and mental illness.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ul individuals and they provide a lot of attractions with a promising salary and ...
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Line 3, column 830, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...dship may help them to gain success and economical independence, which then satisfies thei...
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Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...he need to develop are more significant then the demerits of hardships in extra expe...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02349869452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88554395912 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54046997389 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3493759972 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.176470588 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308457355528 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999392031475 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705636620072 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168445595326 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946106310025 0.056905535591 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ul individuals and they provide a lot of attractions with a promising salary and ...
^^
Line 3, column 830, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...dship may help them to gain success and economical independence, which then satisfies thei...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...he need to develop are more significant then the demerits of hardships in extra expe...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02349869452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88554395912 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54046997389 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3493759972 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.176470588 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308457355528 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999392031475 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705636620072 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168445595326 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946106310025 0.056905535591 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.