Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
A sense of competition should be encouraged according to some people, but other people suppose that teaching the children to co-operate will grow into more useful matures. Both perspectives will trigger the children to always learn to get more knowledge and respect for other people
Children with a competitive sense make them naturally learn many things for getting knowledge. They will be motivated when looking at their friends who have succeeded to reach a dream. What is the consequence of this? Such children will try their best to pursue their dream by studying hard. For example, some countries in East Asia such as South Korea and Japan have applied exam system methods for the student. The method succeeded in triggering the students to study hard, so the number of interest to learn has inclined in 2020.
Meanwhile, co-operating as an important part of learning make the children more respect to all of the people. There is no competition makes them will support each other, moreover they become more adaptable to the environment. This condition give a positive impact because they will get many friends, so sharing knowledge and experience between us will happen. Evidently, in Finland, one of the countries with the best education system has used the new method which is all people are students and teachers in their curriculum. All elements in the school have to share their knowledge with all people in discuss forum. This method has resulted in good culture in this country so that their children become open-minded and respect other opinions.
In conclusion, perspective as to this issue give good impacts on the children such as motivated to study hard and will more respect for all people. Hopefully, learning systems in this issue can be considered.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to make'
Suggestion: to make
...rating as an important part of learning make the children more respect to all of the...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...rning make the children more respect to all of the people. There is no competition makes t...
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Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
...able to the environment. This condition give a positive impact because they will get...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08561643836 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61974214064 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530821917808 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4986589832 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232702693252 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825554973234 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908825134463 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17141607964 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112079978932 0.056905535591 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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