In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
In some nations, parents have a tendency to put pressure on their children, which force them to spend excessive hours on studying and to ignore leisure activities. This essay argues that this trend exerts detrimental effects on students, as well as the whole society. This essay will firstly discuss how extended hours of studying during and after school would reduce students’ productivity, and secondly, discuss how this trend has negative impact on children’s mental health.
To begin with, a counter effect of excessive study time is that it diminishes students’ overall performance. To be more specific, their learning outcome is negatively proportionate to the long time spent on academic matters. This is because extended and continuous studying duration would make children mentally exhausted, diminishing their concentration capacity and ability to assimilate novel knowledge. As a result, even though students invest a lot of time in learning school subjects, their productivity is not as high as they expected. For instance, research results show that 80% of children who spend at least 8 hours doing assignments and reviewing lessons, both at school and at home, do not score as high as those using just 4 hours, indicating that exorbitant amount of study time may lead to worse performance.
Moreover, juveniles would probably suffer from some psychological problems if they are forced to study all the time without resting. More specifically, having to learn an overwhelming amount of information in such a long period would make students feel overloaded, stressed and even suffer some chronic depression. As a result, the declined happiness level is likely to give rise to dissatisfaction with students' surroundings and anti-social behaviours which, consequently, may harm the community they live in. For example, a report demonstrates that most of malleable children who are forced to study non-stop to achieve good academic results would sooner or later act aggressively towards their family and teachers because they cannot withstand the pressure anymore.
In conclusion, excessive study period with reduced leisure time would diminish children's productivity and negatively influence their mental conditions. Therefore, I believe this trend has detrimental impacts on both the individual and communal levels.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 474, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to school'
Suggestion: to school
...udents invest a lot of time in learning school subjects, their productivity is not as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58591549296 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00578032036 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591549295775 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4763569761 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.642857143 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7142857143 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289464985471 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971509778358 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509405304074 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170719618671 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430777192644 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.