A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future
Author, who wrote the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia mentions that average number of headaches have decreased steadily from last 20 years and concludes that by increasing the intake of salicylates in food, this trend can continue. However, author needs to answert some questions to strengthen the arguement.
First of all, it is believed that as Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin(Drug used to treat headaches), it will have the same effect but author did not provided any evidence where it mentions that both of them have same components, effects and side-effects. Also, there is no mention of how both the elements react when it combines with different components.
Secondly, author mentions that food processing companies are adding salicylates to foods which are naturally rich in salicylates as preservative but did not provide any substantial evidence which proves that it helped in decreasing the headache. Even, if salicylates is helping in reducing the headaches, it might be the case that salicylates which is already present in food helped to alleviate the headaches and not the one which was used as preservative.
Thirdly, author did not provide any details about medical conditions of the participants and root cause of their headaches. The claim that salicylates reduced the pain might not be correct as there could be multiple things involved in reducing the headaches such as better sleep and less problems in career or work.
Finally, There are many flaws in author's assumption which needs to backed by some concrete analysis or data. Author needs to provide lab test which can prove that with use salicylates as flavour additives in food can reduce the headache. As of now, it is just a theory which could also backfire if it has some side effects associated with it.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 305 350
No. of Characters: 1518 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.179 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.977 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.702 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.616 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...have the same effect but author did not provided any evidence where it mentions that bot...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun problems is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... the headaches such as better sleep and less problems in career or work. Finally,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10491803279 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76936440346 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544262295082 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0298505519 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.545454545 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 5.70786347227 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223247715656 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757581087622 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811264267095 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12216422403 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561592538144 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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