Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
It is widely believed that kids must not use their devices during the weekdays. However, others believe that children have the right to use their own mobile.In this answer, I will discuss the drivers behind these two views before showing why I favor the former.
On the one hand, if students are prohibited from using devices, they will have a close connection with their friends. When they do not have their phones beside them, they will have nothing to do. They ought to start a conversation with the people around them. After talking and playing with many friends, children are likely to broaden their horizon about the surrounding life. For example, most parents let their kids discover new things by doing several activities with their friends such as hide or seed, and playing puzzles. As a result, those children are tendentious to be a social butterfly.
On the other hand, students using technology devices in school may affect their study. Children these days have a great interested in games, so it is possible that they will use their phones playing games if they are allowed to use it. Furthermore, by concentrating fully on the screen, they must have forgotten to finish homework assignments. As a result, they can not catch up with their friends and be a superstar learners. For instance, online work is given to students to complete at home, but they use their time to use their phone instead of doing homework. Then, they got bad grades. Technology devices can be seen as an indispensable part of children's life, it may make students addicted to and affect their grades at school.
In conclusion, although accepting children to have the freedom using phones can help them blow off some steam after school, they may not finish their homework and affect the score. I believe that strongly banning children using their devices does wonders for creating their characteristics at early ages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96573208723 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50423501698 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560747663551 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5568148218 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7647058824 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8823529412 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340756278109 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121306677575 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757407644014 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242743329136 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522111280319 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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