TOEFL Writing practice test 9
The passage claims that James Bond is a fictional character, created based on many different people, while the professor says that we can directly tie James Bond to real spy that was called Dushko Popov.
Unlike the passage which says that the stories are fictional, professor claims that we can connect the first book that is calledd Casino Royale to an actual event that happened to Dushko Popov.
The passage also claims that no spies have acted in a way James Bond does, like a carefree playboy. But the professor says, that the real spy Popov was like that. And that he used the playboy persona to get more information.
Lastly the professor says that even though Dushko and James are not a copy of each other, they share the most important personality traits. That’s why Dusko is the main inspiration for the fictional spy. Contrary to this, the passage says that James Bond was created from many different experiences of Ian Fleming.
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 88
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 86
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 76
- Should one make an important decision alone 73
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...a fictional character, created based on many different people, while the professor says that w...
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Line 7, column 273, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e says that James Bond was created from many different experiences of Ian Fleming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 30.3222958057 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 789.0 1373.03311258 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 163.0 270.72406181 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84049079755 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 4.04702891845 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29849391112 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 145.348785872 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58282208589 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 419.366225166 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.492990195 49.2860985944 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.625 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 63.6247240618 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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